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[Lejin - Churchboi (REMIX)]

Uh..

The vocals aren't even on point with the instrumental, which is also very low. Try getting something at a slower tempo. And do some better equalizing.

Lejin responds:

Hey poors-Pawn why do go out with a hermaphrodite?? Did your father force u to oral sex him?? Is that y mumble so much like a pathetic failure reject to life??

[Fuck You Demolish!!!]

Straight raw...

More originality then the other, cuz of the whole hi hat setup, and the way how the synths just fit in perfectly. Only thing I would consider changing myself would be the snare, adding some reverb to it, and giving it a griddy sound. You got shit on smash though fam. He put up a good fight, but you were victorious. Not saying this just cuz you RMP, but your track has more to give than his does. You added a dark classical feel with new age Hip-Hop, while he only had the dark classical feel going. You also let the beat stop to emphasize more on the actual melody skill. Well thought out idea with a flawless execution. Keep them banging my nukka.

[Fuck You Caliberthebitch!!!]

Definately The Butcher's style...

But still not all that bad. I'm liking the dark aura that this has, especially when the pianos come in. It was a good attempt, but I'm gonna have to stay Butcher still got the game on smash.

[Lejin's Expectations]

Fail...

After having my previous review deleted from you snitching, I figured that I might as well leave criticism...

First off, you have nothing BUT flow on this track. You only rhymed 3 bars, everything else is just talking and/or repeating the same lines. The beat could be fixed some, feels like the snare is too technoish for the sorta strings. Sorta odd, cuz my cousin Moon sampled the same string, and made the beat waaaaaaaay iller. I got it on my computer if you'd ever like to hear it. But getting back to the point, your voice clips too much, and you lack equalizing. At parts you forced words in, making the flow a bit sloppy, but you came back with it while rappi- er... wait, I mean talking.

And just so you won't have to mark this as abuse again, I didn't insult, cuss, or say anything to offend. I left constructive criticism. Take it, and grow from it bruh.

Lejin responds:

lol you failed at life, rap and highschool too. get ready because when your momma gets tired of your lazy ass stinking up the house. your gonna live on the streets layed out on them park benches you broke bum ass lmfao. Get ready to mop some toilets you mubling piece o shit! lol

grow from minimum wage hahahahahaha you broke joke mumbling faggot

[im done with this freestyle]

Lmao...

Keep this n***as in place. Call MSEE Mecury, 1337 mapquest user. Help keep your haters in place by hiring Merc to blast up a track and keep those sleezy mother fuckers in your sights. Now for a low price of 6 easy payments of $50. =D

Great fucking song bruh. Good work.

[Lejin - Blinded by the light=D]

* sigh *

Get something new to talk about bruh. Lines can be recycled only so much.

Lejin responds:

Just remember that no one understands shit you say so your better off stickign to your scary keyboard ganster ways XD LMFAO you should be ashamed of yourself everyone knows why you sound like you got a dick in your mouth now. We all saw your boyfriend BEAR-RELLA!!! Get ready cause were gonna roast your hermaprodite ass for the rest of yourlittle NG internet life. HAHAHAHAA calm down kid dont let your heart go off racing like that just breathe little midget just breathe i dont wanna be responsible for your nervous breakdown you stupid mumbling stressed out retarded failure of life. Just wait till your momma gets tired of your lazy broke ass sitting around doing nothing playing nindo on your 5 inch monitor you BROKE ASS biAAAAATCH!! LMFAO!

[X Kaliba - The Krusifixion]

Constructive Criticism

Most of the track your flow is on point. Few parts where words were forced in, but nothing major. Parts where Lejin adlibed really through off what you were saying since it was hard to understand. Threw some good punches, but nothing major. You did attempt to flip is line about ya wife, but only to describe how she is and what not, not really hitting hard there. Overall, this track is pretty solid. All I suggest you do is upgrade ya mic quality, and not try to double up on ya voice as much.

Also, Lejin, I got banned for 3 days from posting somethin on one of ya tracks. You had nothing to do with it, mods just saw it and acted quickly. Same shit that happened to you, same shit that happened to him. There are people who read the comments. It wouldn't be like that if you hadn't blocked us. Also, I've unblocked you from sending me PMs. Message me when you feel this is getting tiring. This beef is nothing but a waste of bars.

[The Reading Rap]

LMAO!!!

This shit is fucking great. Lower the vocals a bit, and this'll be on point. Besides the fact of the voice, the voice. The inmate line is also a good line. Just listening to someone rapping about reading is thumbs up work.

[Lejin - Invincible]

Fix ya voice.

Ya shit clips too much. You too busy finding whack beats to diss me on is the only thing you doing. Chump ass nukka. lmao

Lejin responds:

Quit mumbling with that mouthfull of cum flow LMFAO