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[Lejin's Expectations]

Fail...

After having my previous review deleted from you snitching, I figured that I might as well leave criticism...

First off, you have nothing BUT flow on this track. You only rhymed 3 bars, everything else is just talking and/or repeating the same lines. The beat could be fixed some, feels like the snare is too technoish for the sorta strings. Sorta odd, cuz my cousin Moon sampled the same string, and made the beat waaaaaaaay iller. I got it on my computer if you'd ever like to hear it. But getting back to the point, your voice clips too much, and you lack equalizing. At parts you forced words in, making the flow a bit sloppy, but you came back with it while rappi- er... wait, I mean talking.

And just so you won't have to mark this as abuse again, I didn't insult, cuss, or say anything to offend. I left constructive criticism. Take it, and grow from it bruh.

Lejin responds:

lol you failed at life, rap and highschool too. get ready because when your momma gets tired of your lazy ass stinking up the house. your gonna live on the streets layed out on them park benches you broke bum ass lmfao. Get ready to mop some toilets you mubling piece o shit! lol

grow from minimum wage hahahahahaha you broke joke mumbling faggot

[Lejin - Blinded by the light=D]

* sigh *

Get something new to talk about bruh. Lines can be recycled only so much.

Lejin responds:

Just remember that no one understands shit you say so your better off stickign to your scary keyboard ganster ways XD LMFAO you should be ashamed of yourself everyone knows why you sound like you got a dick in your mouth now. We all saw your boyfriend BEAR-RELLA!!! Get ready cause were gonna roast your hermaprodite ass for the rest of yourlittle NG internet life. HAHAHAHAA calm down kid dont let your heart go off racing like that just breathe little midget just breathe i dont wanna be responsible for your nervous breakdown you stupid mumbling stressed out retarded failure of life. Just wait till your momma gets tired of your lazy broke ass sitting around doing nothing playing nindo on your 5 inch monitor you BROKE ASS biAAAAATCH!! LMFAO!

[Lejin - Invincible]

Fix ya voice.

Ya shit clips too much. You too busy finding whack beats to diss me on is the only thing you doing. Chump ass nukka. lmao

Lejin responds:

Quit mumbling with that mouthfull of cum flow LMFAO

[intro japanese style]

Pretty ill...

I'm feeling this style. The twirps aren't that annoying, just lowering them a bit would do it justice it though. I tried to bring the score up, wasn't much. Just +.30 ;.;

gray1 responds:

yo thanks bro i thought it was cool too

[Twilight-Dreaming (Remix)]

Hmm...

This track sounds pretty damn professional. Only thing that I would change myself is the whole drumline's sound. Same rhythm, different sounds basically.

The way that the melodies of the piano and the guitar complement each other so well. it makes it seem that each is at ease with each other being there. Not a lot of the time guitars and pianos with only but a similar melody go well with each other, you played it off well here.

As for the synths in the beginning, I feel that you should've incorporated it more to the song. Cuz you only did put it within the beginning and the end of the track, you really don't get to feel it's presence as much. It really does sound good within the mix.

Overall, I give this track a 9/10. It has a great feel to it, and is overall worth the listen. Good work. ^.^

JakesFable responds:

Yea I did think that the drum beats were a little bad sounding and probly could of been better, But than again im probly getting a drum set for Christmas so when I learn how to play em I can use the beat to this melody and I hope it makes it sound alot better, Thanks alot Very much aprieciated ;)

[Give It 90 Percent]

Jazzy as shit, lmao

This shit got a real good groove to it. The elect. guitar really does this justice using it as a hit. The drumline also goes perfect with the guitar well. The only thing I would advise is changing the piano sound. Sounds too much like the cheap pianos FL provides. It's not as much as it does this track harm, but I just don't like that piano xD. Keep up the good work.

phosphorusprocedure responds:

Yeah, the piano sounds cheap, but it's the best I have right now. Thanks for the review!

[Lejin - FoneyMosie hates me =0]

Fail. Big time...

What happened to "I just want to make music. Stop the beef and the hate" ?

Stop recycling lines. Stop bitings lines as well too. You just bit off BN with the problem/solve it line when ya ripped on YB's beat. You bit of Jay-Z saying "You wouldn't bust a grape in a food fight"

I got 99 problems, but Lejin ain't one. HIT ME!

We're on your mind 24/7. Prove us that we're not. Stop making corny ass tracks towards us. Also, Caliber truely doesn't respect you. But you can keep thinking that he does, we got more of a laugh out of it.

Lejin responds:

only 99? Don't lie to yourself like that you silly stressbag XD Just you wait till your mommy gets old and tired of your waste of food consuming lazy ass hiding in her home. When she gets sick and tired of your mommaz boy ass shes gonna put that ass on the streets. And your gonna end up just like sillybilly... sucking dick for the rest of your life on the street just to eat you bum ass broke like a joke failure of life XD

[AGANG - Welcome to the woods]

Fail....

"I just wanna make music. Quit beefin an hating already..."

Go by ya words n***a. Why you acting like you got something to prove going against us? You not doing anything but making yourself look stupid. And ya boy Nove... he aight, nothing I haven't heard before. Funny how you talked about me mumbling though, while in the background he was singing, while mumbling out his words. That really ain't a good look fam.

Oh, Moses does have a phone. You just don't have the number.

3/5
Current Score

2.60 / 5.00 (+ 0.037)

Just so you could get facts straight, I don't need to downvote you. NG doesn't really like you.

Lejin responds:

lol poorpawn you look mad homeless in your momma basement son. When you gon stop being a mommaz boy hiding in you momma house from the big scary world your afraid to come out and see? with that pronounciation problem i doubt you get very far. you failed at rap, life AND highschool too... so get ready kiddo cause when your mommy leaves your gonna have to get up off that cheap ass radioshack computer and get a fucking job you fucking lazy waste of food LOL! Get ready little boy you gonna be mopping toilets for a living you broke ass bitch XD

[++Classical Vision++ (preview)]

Nice ass melody...

That beginning piano... change the sound of it. Reverb, something! Just so it won't sound so FL Studio like. If you'd like, I could send you some piano sound fonts, them things get the job done. That's the only thing I see wrong with this WIP. Keep up the good work bruh.

djltd responds:

yo man fanks ill take ur advie on board

[Young Breeze - Anthem]

This track is pretty nice...

Though I would expect more bass to be something with this. Along with the horns or something, really all depends. The drum line also could do without the clap, and the snaps. That just makes this feel less hard than what it's intended to be. If you through in some hard type Drumline type shit, and had a crazy ass snare going off in the background, this shit would be fire. Would sound more like an anthem since it'll have the whole band marching feel to it as well.

Vote: 4/5
Current Score

3.99 / 5.00 (+ 0.00071)

YoungBreeze responds:

yea, just might do that.